The Man Next Door
He stands there waiting for them to come, I don’t know what but there
coming. Ever since he moved in to that house strange things have been
happening. The other day I saw red beams coming from his windows and loud
screams. I have to do something before something bad happens. I have been
studying his routine. At exactly 8:45 he stand there waiting for them and at 10:25 he goes back
inside. Today I’m going to find what he is and what he is waiting for. Its 8:45 and he is outside this gives me 2 hours and 25 minutes to get the information I need. I’m in the building and it
looks nothing like I would have expected it has black soft carpet, wooden
stairs and fancy lamps. Its 9:05 and I can’t find anything useful
but there is a button on the counter I’m going to push it. It has open up a
secret basement and looks like it has some alien tech. it’s 10:00 and I have found out that he’s not a man he an alien trying to send
aliens to enslave humans and rule Earth. I found a button that says “warning
don’t push.” I am going to push it maybe it will stop the invasion. I pushed it
and it made a loud scream I have to get out now. As I got to the door he was
standing right in front of me.
To Be Continued…
Wow... very suspenseful writing. I look forward to the next update. I think this writing would flow even more smoothly if you had paragraphs for each new idea - perhaps this is a change you could make? Remember that sometimes a short, snappy sentence is more effective than a long one with lots of commas. Impressive effort, Mannix.
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